Published February 22, 2008
Shooting star...
I have awaken now
Hidden in sight
Never thought there would be
A second chance
Been wasting away
Sleeping myself
Threw all my hopes
Then you came along
Shooting star...
Shine for me once more
Your lights are a comfort
Discovered again
In life there is
A second time
You gave me your part
Helped me restart
Mended these wounds
That once was tearing this heart
Then you came along
Under the southern lights
Where life feels right
I go in closer and closer
My dreams press
Tight against yours
Burn for me
Under the southern lights
Where life feels right
I go in closer and closer
My dreams press
Tight against yours
Burn, burn, burn
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Hey Acoustic!
I liked it...even though I was a little...choppy as DR said.
Have you actually got out your guitar and tried singing it with the music?
I'm no master on these things...just a beginner, but try flushing it out a bit
Other than that I like what you used in the actual song
~Lulu
This seemed choppy to me. Like it didn't flow. But maybe it does. XD I liked the emotion behind it. well written. keep up the good work!
It seems to be very emo, a lot like something I went through a while ago. Well, anyway, your style is good, but you could use a little work on your choice of words.
I like the lyrics over all though.
It was okay, but I do think that you could have used more condencesing language and more imagery--examples of what you are talking about.
not bad.
actually it reminded me of an Angels and Airwaves song.
I found the first bit before the chorus better. Afer, it seems you're trying too hard to rhyme a bit.
I learned that sometimes its not neccessary, and you showed that quite well at first.